Monday, February 13, 2012

Composition

My students have been working really hard in their Composition class... Just thought I'd share one of their efforts. These kids have only been exposed to English in school, so we have to start slowly. But once they get the basics, they can really 'take flight'!

A Bird in a Cage and a Crow

by Neha, age 11 (Spelling, grammar and layout have not been edited.)

*Once there in Hong Kong lived a king named Peter. He had a beautiful bird with yellow feathers. It was in a cage. She was never happy in the cage. One day when cage’s door was opened, she flew right away in an orchard. There was a crow playing with a small girl. The crow was nice and made friends with the bird.

Bird: Hey friend, can I live here?

Crow: Yes, you may. But where have you been living for months?

Bird: I was in the king’s palace and in a cage. But now was the time to escape. And now I am totally free. Who is that girl?

Crow: She is my best friend. Everyday her mother gives me food. We eat together. But now you’ll also eat with us. They are very nice.

Bird: How nice of you. You offered me your food also. You gave me house to live in.

Crow: If I do good to you, so God will also be happier. Come on we’ll go and have our lunch.

Bird: O’ yes. Let’s go!


*After the lunch had finished the bird and the crow flew away in the crow’s house.

Bird: What a nice food it was. I liked it very much. Are you fed of this food that aunt give you daily?

Crow: No, I like her food. Nice but I am not feeling well.

Bird: What happened to you


*Then the crow laughs a little bit.

Crow: I was just joking. Don’t be serious.

Bird: Are you gone mad? I was really afraid.


*When the evening came they were going to bed.

Crow: Good night little friend.

Bird: Good night. Have sweet dreams.


*In the morning when they woke up the bird was not there. The crow became serious. Then he went to search her. But he couldn’t find her. When the crow saw a river flowing down the tree, he saw the Bird, who was yelling for help.

Crow: Wait! I’ll help you by putting big stones like a dam.


*So he went to put big big stones. When they were put he helped her with his beak on her tail.

Bird: What a nice bird you are! Thanks for saving my life.

Crow: But where have you been?

Bird: I went to bring some food for us.

Crow: Never mind. Come on. We go home.


*One day when the crow was in the orchard, he got shooted by a man. He fell down. And when the bird saw this she came to him and called the aunt. He is already better now.

Crow: Thanks.

Bird: One good turn deserves another.